This week in Te Ngahere we made a Narrative about a story called WIng. It is a video on youtube and we had to rewrite a scene of it and add lots of detail. Here is my Narrative:
The sky was murky and unable to see. A petrified creature ran into the forest with only one wing to spare. When he was home he dashed upstairs to make a new wing. The petrified creature made his new wing and shot out of a large grey catapult. He was spinning round and round in the murky sky where the stars were glistening brightly. Until bang, he dropped on the barky forest floor; his wooden wing shattered as he was flying in the sky. He was unconscious but when his dark brown eyes opened, there were four awful-looking creatures. They had a beak as sharp as a shark's tooth, wings as sharp as a machete. Then a moment later there was a young fearless girl who was playing a mournful sound on a flute as her fingers moved mildly across the flute, she was trying to save the petrified creature's life. The machete-winged creatures didn't like the sound of the mournful flute playing so they rushed into the deep dark wood following the girl and then grabbed her and tugged on her wing until the wing hacked off of the fearless girl. The fearless girl was hurt and was dirty and covered in mud and bark, the petrified creature walked over to the girl and covered up her wound from the wing. They could hear the machete-winged creatures in the deep dark forest ahead, the gorgeous girl and the boy held hands, and with one wing each, they flew into the murky sky. The machete-winged creatures walked to where the girl and the boy flew off and they snapped the girl’s wooden flute into smithereens. Have you ever written anything with this much detail?
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